Friday Snippet - Hope’s Haven Final
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Shrill metallic screeching reverberated in the tunnel. Huddled in the mud, Rackman squeezed his hands over his ears, trying to hold back his own scream. The Fade was calling in reinforcements. Even after so many years, their rudimentary calls were dreadfully familiar. After the pack showed up, they’d drive him, screaming and shrilling until he went mad with fear and ran ahead with no thought to the trap, exactly how they hunted wolves when the eclipse cast full night on the surface.
Maybe the pack would be occupied with fresh kills upside. He could handle one Fade.
The ground sloped downward. Despite the surge of adrenaline, he slowed his crawl. His arms trembled and his knees were scraped and bloody, but the ravine should be just ahead. The underground creek used to speed up here, and Kermit had nearly been swept over the cliff. Who knew how far the water fell, where it led, how deep into the ground it traveled. Deeper caverns, darker, more Fades. The thought set Rackman’s teeth chattering so hard his jaw ached.
He edged to the right. The tunnel he needed would be just ahead, invisible, except for the faint draft. Concentrating, so careful not to slip off the edge into the ravine, he froze. The rotten cake slapped him in the face. Gagging, he fought against his instincts and crawled forward. This was the way. No Fade would keep him from Hope.
The mud ended. Coating himself in a fresh layer of moistness, he crept forward, still on hands and knees. A cool draft caressed his face, bringing another overwhelming wave of stench. Slowly, he gained his feet. Trailing his right hand along the wall, he fought his fear step by step.
The Fade was more elemental than flesh and blood. It fed on emotions, on fear. It would use his instincts against him and feed on that turmoil rioting in the pit of his stomach. It wouldn’t bleed, couldn’t as far as he knew. No weapon would touch it, but it was terrified of water. Any water.
He’d spit on it, piss on it, throw mud on it, whatever was required. He would not give in to his fear and run. He would not give in to the quivering in his knees and fall into a wailing, sniveling ball of tears. Not when Hope was so close.
Rancid molasses clogged his nostrils. Goose bumps raised on his arms, shivering down his back, tightening his muscles for flight. With trembling hands, he ripped open his pants, hoping he could perform on call and piss all over the son of a bitch.
A wash of cold drenched him, seizing his lungs. The Fade touched him, held him in a grip of sweet, fetid breath and cold terror.
Suddenly, all he could think about was Kermit. How much he hated the Butcher at first. How much Rackman hated himself. Kermit overcame his hatred, though. Kermit gave him hope for the future. He gave Rackman a reason to live, to try and redeem the blood on his hands. Then Hope’s Haven lured him onward. But in the beginning, it was the ugly frog-like alien who should have hated him, but instead saved his life.
Humming that low, resonant sound meant to soothe, Rackman smiled. He deserved to die. Fitting that he would die remembering his best friend. A Quag.
The Fade recoiled. Cold peeled away, leaving him shivering. His knees gave out, and he fell, catching himself before planting his face in the rocks. Lightheaded, he wet his lips and continued the gentle, soothing sound.
With one last metallic shriek, the Fade fled.
Afraid to wait, afraid it would regain its courage, Rackman fumbled his pants closed and crawled forward. Humming. Smiling.
A faint glow crawled up the walls, created by some florescent plant that he and Kermit had spent years trying to identify in the safety of the Obsession. It was rather pretty, a soft white fur that released a gentle light. Kermit had pronounced it edible and quite delicious, although his crap had glowed for weeks later, much to his mortification and Rack’s amusement.
Chuckling beneath his breath at the memory, he stood and quickened his pace. The first glint of metal sent his stomach churning again. Running, he turned into the side cave. Crates were tossed about, abandoned metal covered with glowing white furred plants. And there, deeper in the cavern, a softly lit ship.
Heart in his throat, he raced forward. Smaller than he expected for a colonization ship, but then the original crew had been less than twenty. The ramp was down. Was that good or bad? The ship groaned, creaking frighteningly like the Fade’s shrill cry. The medical bay–where would it be?
He tried to remember the layout of the Orion, but his mind blanked. So close. How could she possibly be alive?
Broken crates spewed farming tools, rotted clothing, tattered books, plaz utensils, heaps of moldering food. The hold, of course. The cryo area would be aft.
He shoved a crate aside and pried at the rusted door. It was stuck. Frantically, he ran back to the farming tools and hefted a shovel. Rusted, but solid enough, he decided. Racing back, he levered the protesting door open and stepped inside.
To Hope Brennan’s resting place.
Ah, clever, brilliant woman! Since she was the last surviving crew member, she used the other cryo units’ power cells to extend her cycle. The cells were all dead but one. One cell still glowed.
Hope was alive.
Hands trembling, tears sizzling painfully on the acid scar, Rackman keyed the awaken sequence. Thirty minutes. Cursing archaic technology, he paced back and forth. He tried to rake his hair out of his face, but it was hardened with clay.
Thirty minutes–long enough to wash some mud away. He went back to the hold and used some of the cloth to wipe his face and hands clean. He couldn’t find any water.
Thinking of water, he winced. He desperately needed to empty his bladder. Just in case the Fades came again, he used a plaz container to gather his urine. Disgusting, but an effective deterrent, as he and Kermit had learned.
Kermit. Rack smiled again, his heart aching with new understanding. So fragile, so tender. He never hoped to feel so good again, to feel genuine warmth and friendship, especially for a Quag. He found himself humming again and checked his comm unit. Startled, he hurried back to the cryo unit and counted down the last five minutes.
The thick plaz lid finally cracked, steam pouring out. Terrified, he pushed it open. Would she still be alive, unharmed, aware? What did she look like? Would she truly be glad to find herself awake one hundred years later than she planned?
Breathe, damn it. Breathe!
Her eyes opened. Blue. Dark blue. She hauled in air and choked. Unable to tear his gaze away from hers, he waited silently until she spoke.
Hope smiled on Rackman. “I knew you’d come.”
The End








July 13th, 2007 at 7:14 am
Yay Rack!! Awesome post. Of course, that could also be an excellent beginning. How is she going to feel to find out that she’s 100 years older than she feels, or that all she knew is gone. We wants more! *g*. Have a happy Friday the 13th (I see wizards in my future- either tonight or tomorrow).
P.S. I finished Survive My Fire, thought it was totally awesome and will write it up as soon as I have both time and gray cells.
July 13th, 2007 at 7:46 am
Nice story. It’s also 1 week away from your release date. I’m so excited! Congrats, again!
July 13th, 2007 at 8:11 am
This has been a scintillating read, Joely. Nicely done.
July 13th, 2007 at 8:24 am
Fantastic ending!!
Great story. Thanks for sharing it, Joely.
July 13th, 2007 at 11:30 am
I couldn’t help it, I posted a snippet.
July 13th, 2007 at 11:35 am
I want more Rackman stories.
July 13th, 2007 at 2:01 pm
Was great to re-read in one shot. The pacing was excellent.
The urine bit made me smile. I’ve been working on research for my Roman Apicius book and food history is a lot of that. Cato used to talk about the glories of urine after eating cabbage: http://penelope.uchicago.edu/Thayer/E/Roman/Texts/Cato/De_Agricultura/K*.html
In case you are interested.
My husband’s 8-year old mind is always going to reference that passage now.
GREAT READ!
July 13th, 2007 at 3:05 pm
Wonderful! I love your descriptions of the Fade - absolutely creepy! Now I wish there was more.
But all good things…you know. Thanks for the great read!
July 13th, 2007 at 4:13 pm
An excellent series; I hope you’ll consider working the whole thing into something much longer. The space-opera feel is great; full of energy. And I liked the Fade, too…
July 13th, 2007 at 4:22 pm
Bah. I posted a comment, but it’s vanished. Let’s try again.
Great series, and I hope you’ll consider expanding it into something else. There’s huge energy in it; proper action-adventure stuff that doesn’t get bogged down in exposition. I’d love to see more of it.
July 13th, 2007 at 4:23 pm
But of course, as soon as I post, the old post appears. Sorry!
July 13th, 2007 at 4:31 pm
I’m with Ann: it sounds as much like a beginning as an ending. I also hope you’ll consider expanding it. Nice work!
July 13th, 2007 at 5:49 pm
Oh, Ann, thank you so much!!! *blush* I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks, everybody, for following Rack to Hope. Yeah, someday there might be other adventures in Rack’s future. Who knows. *wink*
July 13th, 2007 at 7:08 pm
Excellent finale Joely, I really enjoyed that story
Thank you!
July 13th, 2007 at 8:30 pm
Love the description of the Fade — and how it was chased away with the soothing sound.
July 13th, 2007 at 10:34 pm
Excellent story. Reminds me a bit of C.L. Moore’s Northwest Smith stories, if she’d been allowed to write about urine during the 30’s….. (wink)
July 14th, 2007 at 12:26 am
Great story! I loved reading it! I really liked the ending, too.
July 14th, 2007 at 4:48 am
I missed most of these so i’ve opted to download the pdf and start from the beginning–as a reward for when i get settled into the 70 Days of Sweat challenge. I really liked the snippet I read several weeks ago tho so didn’t want to spoil the ending by reading it now.
Is it just that I’m seeing thru the lense of my own storyworld in which my characters’s names are pointers to the theme, or is it no accident you named the woman who was Rack’s motivation *Hope*? i was asking myself that when I read the snippet from several weeks ago.
Faith is the name of the character who carries the story in my snippet this week (and for the next several)
July 14th, 2007 at 9:59 am
Thank you, everyone! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Joy, I definitely choose character names with intent. You’re absolutely right that Hope represents Rackman’s hope and redemption. Rackman’s name is loosely based on a historical pirate, Rackham. The Quag comes from quagmire, because the planet is swampy, and since he’s a froggy kind of character, his nickname is Kermit. Even Briggs was chosen because it can mean “prison” and I wanted to show what blind hatred can do.
Other stories I’ve done special names for: in the free reads, Iman undergoes a great trial of faith, and his name means, yep, faith.
Other names, I just like them.
A funny name story: Gregar and Dharman are two warriors from the Blood series. Can you tell that I was watching Dharma and Greg at the time??
July 14th, 2007 at 10:01 am
Oh, Crystal, that cabbage urine article is hysterical. I love it! Thanks!
July 14th, 2007 at 10:35 am
God, I love this story. I love how some people find themselves when at the nadir of their fear — when they decide to fight and be happy instead of roll over and die because that’s easier. I love when something means so much to something that they will risk the most crushing defeat of hope just for the chance at finding it.
*happy sigh*