Comments on: Friday Snippet - Well of Sky Part 2 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/ Dreaming in Rhyme Thu, 24 Jul 2008 17:03:39 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.0.2 by: Joy Renee http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9335 Fri, 07 Sep 2007 20:45:31 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9335 still wonder full. can't wait for part 3 which i'm off to read right now. still wonder full. can’t wait for part 3 which i’m off to read right now.

]]> by: Joely Sue Burkhart » Blog Archive » Friday Snippet - Well of Sky Part 3 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9320 Fri, 07 Sep 2007 12:26:00 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9320 [...] Part One Part Two Shaded by a canopy of trees, Lady Jade Mirror sat atop a crumbling pyramid so old no one remembered when or who built it. Birds called and sang; insects hummed in accompaniment. The beasts of the jungle knew her better than the people of Itza’s Well. [...] […] Part One Part Two Shaded by a canopy of trees, Lady Jade Mirror sat atop a crumbling pyramid so old no one remembered when or who built it. Birds called and sang; insects hummed in accompaniment. The beasts of the jungle knew her better than the people of Itza’s Well. […]

]]> by: Carter http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9193 Mon, 03 Sep 2007 13:20:07 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9193 Awesome description! I wonder if Lord Itzam saw the same things the others did. Maybe he has a different perspective. I think this captures the Mayans' apocalyptic philosophies very well. Brava! Awesome description!

I wonder if Lord Itzam saw the same things the others did. Maybe he has a different perspective. I think this captures the Mayans’ apocalyptic philosophies very well. Brava!

]]> by: zette http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9172 Sun, 02 Sep 2007 19:08:55 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9172 An excellent closing line! Her terror felt real and the scene powerful. Great stuff! An excellent closing line! Her terror felt real and the scene powerful. Great stuff!

]]> by: Bri http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9150 Sat, 01 Sep 2007 15:56:08 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9150 Really great - I want to know what the old man saw that he was serene in the face of all her terror. The sense of terror and the way you describe it - along with other moments in this snippet (especially the sacrifice scene) were incredibly realistic and believable. :) Really great - I want to know what the old man saw that he was serene in the face of all her terror. The sense of terror and the way you describe it - along with other moments in this snippet (especially the sacrifice scene) were incredibly realistic and believable. :)

]]> by: Joely http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9136 Fri, 31 Aug 2007 18:28:25 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9136 DING!! Cheryl hits it. Jade thinks she's a coward because she can't face HER fear. Her fear isn't what the villagers fear. My fear isn't yours. We might be brave on some things, and believe we're utter cowards when it comes to the ONE THING that scares us spitless. Fear. It's always about fear. DING!! Cheryl hits it. Jade thinks she’s a coward because she can’t face HER fear. Her fear isn’t what the villagers fear. My fear isn’t yours. We might be brave on some things, and believe we’re utter cowards when it comes to the ONE THING that scares us spitless.

Fear. It’s always about fear.

]]> by: cherylp http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9135 Fri, 31 Aug 2007 18:18:43 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9135 Very well done! I think you've done a good job of pointing out that other people's fears are not necessarily your own. The villagers have their fears, and Lady Jade Mirror has hers. Cool snippet! Very well done! I think you’ve done a good job of pointing out that other people’s fears are not necessarily your own. The villagers have their fears, and Lady Jade Mirror has hers. Cool snippet!

]]> by: Nicole http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9134 Fri, 31 Aug 2007 16:53:23 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9134 I too wonder why the "coward" runs into the scary jungle, and who it was that jumped and made her feel ashamed. Very well written bit. Definitely make me want to read more. I too wonder why the “coward” runs into the scary jungle, and who it was that jumped and made her feel ashamed. Very well written bit. Definitely make me want to read more.

]]> by: Gabriele http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9132 Fri, 31 Aug 2007 15:23:49 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9132 That's a strong, vivd scene. Ian, I think she gets along with the jaguar just fine. Can't blame here, there are days I'd prefer those cats to humans as well. :) That’s a strong, vivd scene.

Ian, I think she gets along with the jaguar just fine. Can’t blame here, there are days I’d prefer those cats to humans as well. :)

]]> by: Crystal http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9130 Fri, 31 Aug 2007 14:08:20 +0000 http://joelysueburkhart.com/blog/2007/08/30/friday-snippet-well-of-sky-part-2/#comment-9130 I love the tension here, especially since we know that something wiped them out--it really helps drag the reader in, making us all desperate to find out what happened! Not sure if you are making changes or not and this is nitpicky but this threw me: "Head splintering, she wished she could silence the entire crowd." I know what you mean with head splintering but it seemed so literal in the way it was used--can a head really splinter? It just threw me out of the passage and made me think about it. Again, me being nitpicky, so feel free to roll your eyes and ignore! I love the tension here, especially since we know that something wiped them out–it really helps drag the reader in, making us all desperate to find out what happened!

Not sure if you are making changes or not and this is nitpicky but this threw me: “Head splintering, she wished she could silence the entire crowd.” I know what you mean with head splintering but it seemed so literal in the way it was used–can a head really splinter? It just threw me out of the passage and made me think about it. Again, me being nitpicky, so feel free to roll your eyes and ignore!

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