Friday Snippet - The Road to Shanhasson

This section comes shortly after the one from last week when Shannari cut the Shadowed Blood up pretty well.  If you’ve read The Rose of Shanhasson, you know that Shannari has a deeply ingrained fear when she’s grabbed or threatened from behind (another reason those little touches last week were so significant).  Gregar is determined to make sure she’s well able to defend herself if he’s not at her back.

First draft, edited for content to reduce spoilers to the first book in the series. 

From the eager look on Dharman’s face as she faced him with a rahke, Gregar had certainly been correct. The boy looked more than happy to receive the same kind of punishment that she’d given the Blood yesterday.

“It was not punishment, Khul’lanna. You honored me greatly.” Gregar laughed, shaking his head ruefully. “You honored me so much that now Khul demands to drill with you as well as these lads. Soon even Varne will demand the chance.”

“She shall refuse.” Dharman bit off each word, his jaws straining.

Gregar gave him a considering gaze and nodded. “Aye. I should not like to see Khul’lanna drill with Varne any time soon.”

How dare they dictate whom she drilled with? As though either of them had any say in what she intended to do. “I believe I’ll march back to Camp, find Varne, and demand he drill with me immediately.”

Dharman blanched, his hand fisted on his rahke, but Gregar bent over laughing. Shaking his head, he straightened and slapped the boy on the back. “You have my sympathies, Dharman. Watching you attempt to order her about will prove quite amusing.”

Irritated, she turned away and started walking back toward Camp. She didn’t much appreciate Gregar’s sense of humor, not when he backwards encouraged the boy to try and give her orders. A boy! She–

A footfall behind her was the only warning. Arms locked about her, one hand about her throat, another pinning her arms to her sides. Fear curdled her stomach, until she recognized the boy’s sweet scent of buttered honey.

Because he’d made her afraid, she quaked with rage. She fought him, slamming her head back, kicking his shins, raking at his face with her left hand.

Her left hand. He’d only pinned her right. She reached across her body and dragged the rahke from the sheath. It felt awkward, even more so than when she’d first taken the small six-inch knife into a hand well-used to a sword.

“Good.” Gregar glided around in front of them. His eyes glittered in the sunlight, faceted obsidian and shadows, his voice cold and hard. “Most men are right handed and so typically eliminate that threat first. Since you’re a woman, a man will likely want your throat in his hand, too. He won’t consider your left hand a threat at all.”

Dharman kept his hand firm on her throat, but he didn’t close off her wind. He actually held her very carefully indeed, which only pissed her off more. Her best effort had done nothing but make the boy sweat more of that sweet innocent cookie scent. “The rahke feels strange in my left hand. I don’t know how to hold it so I can stab him.”

A small tremor flickered through the boy at her back. Not fear. Anticipation. His fingers tightened minutely, his body shifting slightly as though in…welcome. Her stomach clenched with dread.

“It shall be easier once you carry my ivory rahke,” Gregar said. “You should wear it on your left. You’ll know when to use it rather than the black.”

“I’m not going to carry your rahke,” she retorted. “This is pointless! I’m not going to stab anyone.”

Gregar lifted her left hand and turned the rahke in her grip so the blade pointed down and back along her wrist. “This is the position for rear defense. You can hide the blade relatively well by keeping your hand down and holding the rahke flat along your forearm. When you strike, let the blade drop into your grip at right angles, like this.” He demonstrated, wrapping his fingers around her hand firmly.

Stepping closer, he moved her arm back slowly until she felt the blade point dig into the boy behind her. Her palms were so sweaty she likely would have dropped the blade without Gregar’s fingers on hers. Dharman held himself very still. As tall as he was for his age, she could only imagine exactly what body part she threatened with the vicious rahke.

“Don’t think. Don’t hesitate. If someone grabs you, unsheathe a rahke and smoothly stab backward, like this. Then drag the rahke up with all your strength. Slash side to side if you have time.”

The thought of maiming the boy like that made her light headed. Breathing shallowly, she closed her eyes and concentrated on deeper, slower breaths so she didn’t thoroughly embarrass herself and faint.

“Although it hurts like the Three Hells, this is not necessarily a killing blow,” Gregar continued. “The more you scramble his intestines, the better your chance at escape and his death.”

Her eyes flew open, locking on his face. “If I did this to you, you’d die.”

He smiled slowly, flames flickering to life in the dark shadows of his eyes. “Do you think so? As a Death Rider, I’m already half dead. Some argue more than half dead. To win this ivory rahke, I climbed the jagged slopes of Vulkar’s Mountain and sliced my body to ribbons. Thankfully, Vulkar accepted my sacrifice, else I would have died on those black slopes. I saw the fiery lake at the center of His Mountain, but the cost was part of my life. I’m very, very difficult to kill, Khul’lanna. All Death Riders are. If one were to grab you thusly–”

His jaw worked, his teeth grinding together. Dharman gathered her closer to his body, his grip comforting, now.

“Gut him like this, but don’t assume he’s disabled. The best way to kill a Death Rider is to slit his throat and offer his own blood sacrifice to Vulkar as quickly as possible. Aim for the large veins in the neck and groin. If you don’t finish him quickly, he’ll slaughter you with his own intestines tangled about his legs. We do not stop. Not for anything.”

“You did,” she whispered, tears burning her eyes.

“Nay.” He stepped back. “I have not stopped, Khul’lanna. That is why we shall do the drill again and again and again, until you would stab even Khul if he dared seize you from behind unawares.”

“I can’t do this.”

“Aye, you can, and you will.” The look in his eyes made her skin crawl. It was as though he looked into the future, reading the weft and weight of some tapestry she was only vaguely aware of. “Your life depends on it. If Dharman doesn’t bleed from a dozen wounds within the hour, I shall be severely disappointed.”

 

 

14 Responses to “Friday Snippet - The Road to Shanhasson”

  1. IanT Says:

    I’ve no doubt at all that this scene will come back later on, in a situation where she has to remember the training. :-)

    Oh - one thought - should she know what a cookie is..? Just struck me as a little anachronistic.

  2. Joely Says:

    Ian, it’s very scary exactly how often she gets to apply this drill. :D

    I checked Online Etymology Dictionary and cookie dates to early 1700s. So it might technically work, but I could easily use cakes instead. Thanks for pointing it out.

  3. Bethanie Says:

    “Nay.” He stepped back. “I have not stopped, Khul’lanna….

    Oh, this gave me chills… what a fantastic snippet! Especially nice after an evening and early morning spent editing a bunch of stone-cold science I don’t understand most of… THIS I understand. Lovely…

    (I also found ‘cookie’ a bit jarring, though it could work fine if it were introduced earlier as something that’s part of the culture. :-D )

  4. Krista Says:

    Yummy.

  5. Travis Says:

    I found the use of “cookie” and also the phrase “pissed off” slight out of place. But other than that, this passage is further proof that I need to purchase your work for my Lady and I to enjoy together.

    Thanks for continuing to share these snippets.

  6. Joely Says:

    Thanks Bethanie! I hope you finished wading through all that science. :D

    Krista, definitely yummy. :D

    Thanks so much, Travis. I agree, pissed off nagged me too, more than cookie. It will be replaced in revision.

  7. Ann Says:

    Maybe something that references the Dragon piss? Having to drink that would most likely make someone very unhappy? :)
    Great snippet (I always enjoy reading your snippets).

  8. Ann Says:

    Sorry about the linky thing. It’s a habit, I see the linky thing I fill in the linky thing, totally forgetting I haven’t posted anything to link to (unless you haven’t read my TT). I’ll try to post tomorrow.

  9. Gabriele Says:

    Those men all have a masochistic streak. ;)

    That knife must indeed be difficult to wield for Shannari. I’ve trained with a bastard sword, and when I first got my hands on a Roman gladius, it felt really wrong.

  10. Susan Helene Gottfried Says:

    No wonder this has been so scary for you to write… this is hard stuff. Dark stuff.

    I like.

  11. cherylp Says:

    This is heavy stuff. I agree with Gabriele, these men are masochistic. If Shannari doesn’t end up killing Gregar soon, I’ll be surprised. The way he picks at her, she might just do it to defend her own soul.

  12. Joely Says:

    Gabriele and Cheryl, the only *true* masochist is Gregar. He does get off on pain, both the giving and the receiving. Dharman isn’t a typical warrior either, but how much of a masochist he is remains to be shown. The Sha’Kae al’Dan count blood as honor, so naturally blood sacrifice is very important to their culture, but they don’t relish pain exactly.

    Gregar is special. :D

    Susan, this piece is nothing compared to the darkness I wrote last night. It’s not hard to write, exactly. It’s hard to tell the story the way Gregar demands it to be told. I hate pain myself, so my instinct is to flinch away and make it all better, not make it worse.

    Cheryl, you might be closer to the truth than you think. ;-)

  13. Jen P Says:

    Ooo… *rubs hands together* This promises to be interesting… :-)

  14. Joy Renee Says:

    it is hard, hard i say, to read a scene like this and not be able to turn the page!

    thanx for all the visits to my snippets while i was sick and not managing much reciprocation.

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