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The Perfect Form Rejection Letter

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I’ll bet someone back east is going, “Now why don’t he write?”
~ Timmons from Dances with Wolves.

Middle Monster absolutely fell in love with this movie over the weekend. She loved the horses and buffalo. After sending out the first wave of queries on Letters, I keep seeing this scene in my mind, where Timmons is pointing to the dead person loaded with arrows. Irrational, I know, but as soon as I hit “send” on a query, this is what comes into my mind. Even if it’s a rejection, I want to know now, quick, soon, why haven’t I heard???

The waiting game sucks bracken swamp water.

In nearly five years of writing and submitting, I’ve seen quite a few rejection form letters from agents. I know they work really hard to convey ”no thanks” without being demeaning or negative in any way, because we’ve all heard that it only takes one yes. ONE. That’s it. So the old “this isn’t for me” isn’t meant as a lame platitude. Even when our name becomes “author.”

Seriously, though, I think they’re all working way too hard. In the end, all I really want is a quick response.

Dear Author: No. Agent.

or

Dear Author: Send x. Agent.

or even better

Dear Joely: Sign here. DREAM AGENT.

See? I’m easy to please. :D

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The Dreaded Synopsis

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Tonight, I had one task and one task only: conquer a synopsis for Letters.

This shouldn’t have been an unreasonable task. After all, I had a version I wrote months ago (before the revision/expansion was complete). Surely that first version couldn’t be that bad.

It was that bad.

So I tossed the whole thing out and started all over again. My undying thanks to Molly, May, and Ann for their quick and willing assistance. The package will go out tomorrow over lunch!

I’m also in the middle of gathering raw data for the Mayan uf. I ended up with a key idea that may or may not have absolutely nothing to do with the story when I actually sit down to write it, but it sounds powerful:

To save this world, she’ll have to kill the only man she ever loved.

Jaid isn’t a kick-ass heroine, so it’s not exactly obvious what that means.

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Fess Up Monday

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Forgive me, blogosphere, but it’s been months since my last Monday confession. As I gear up for a hard-hitting fall, I plan to get back into the more rigid structure of deadlines and accountability. Yes, I realize it’s technically Sunday night but I’m getting a headstart. :D

With Letters done and kicked out the door, I’ve had a few days to breathe and reflect on the year so far. To be honest, I’ve realized that to make 2008 a success in my mind, I need to get the Maya story ready to query.

Soooo…. I will be filing away Given in Fire for a bit. Mentally, the story fizzled out on me anyway. I think that’s why I tend to be so compulsive with my writing–when the fire burns, I feel like I must get it all down, now, immediately, before I lose it. The story was going gangbusters, and then Letters suddenly bubbled up and commanded my attention as I came around the last bend and galloped through the homestretch. I planned to finish the block to spreadsheet details…But the fire was cold. Even when I fanned the embers by flipping through my notes, it just wasn’t there.

I don’t have a committed deadline for this third Keldari novella anyway–other than a desire to finish it so all three can be bundled for wider distribution. With Road already submitted (and it was a monster at 113.5K), me thinks I need to give everyone at DP a little breathing room.

So this weekend, I took out my handy dandy notebook and sketched out a Plan. If you know me, you know that as soon as I say “Plan” then at least one monster gets sick, something blows up at the Evil Day Job, or That Man gets his pants in a twist about something or other. But I’ll say it anyway. This is my plan for the rest of the year, submit to change obviously.

Last week of August

  1. Since I finished Letters, I took a look at ANTs, starring Conn’s brother, Victor tonight. Yowza there is some fine story in those hastily written and disjointed scenes! I’m dying to finish this story too, but it can’t be high on my priority list until/if Letters sells. I will make some notes, though. I have this very definite scene in my head of Victor, Shiloh and Mama Connagher coming to Miss Belle’s B&B for Thanksgiving dinner to break the news about Victor’s “coming out of the closet” so to speak in Dallas. *dies laughing*
  2. Shuffle my brain to the Mayan urban fantasy instead of Given in Fire. Oddly, the music you guys suggested is sending my brain firing on all cylinders, even for this other story. So the playlist is staying until one (or more) songs really start speaking to me. Organize my notes, continue gathering the raw data.

September

  1. Revise Night Sun Rising to become the backstory for the new Mayan urban fantasy. The ending needs to be worsened (no HEA!) and some of the mythology needs to be compiled into a bible for the series. Ultimately, my plan is to serialize NSR here on the blog as Friday Snippets, starting…soon. The trick is timing. I don’t want to give away my worldbuilding (because in my obviously biased opinion, it is incredibly unique) until I have something definitive in hand for the main project. So while I’m chomping at the bit to give this story away, reality tells me to hold off a bit. I do have an “alien goth” short story I could possibly give away–with the understanding that I don’t have time to edit it again. I keep planning on expanding it to novella length, but I just don’t have the time.
  2. As I revise NSR, I will make notes, worldbuild, and plot the new Mayan urban fantasy. I have all the backstory now — and the foundation for the world. But I need the STORY. Lots of work here, but I’m excited about the possibilities.
  3. Continue querying Letters.
  4. Requested revisions on Road when they come (moving to highest priority until they’re done).

October

  1. Polished worldbuilding and plot completely finished for the Mayan urban fantasy.
  2. Polished proposal package including synopsis.
  3. Consider a Fast Draft sometime this month to get a nice chunk of story written.
  4. Continue querying Letters if needed.
  5. Requested revisions on Road when they come (moving to highest priority when they come).

I won’t detail November and December because it’s just too scary. Suffice it to say, I plan to write my considerable tuckus off this fall. I *will* be querying the Mayan story by the end of the year. I’m treating this project very seriously, from proposal to finished product. Worst case it takes me through Dec. to finish it. However, I’m hoping that if I get the proposal and storyboard in excellent shape FIRST, that I can pull off a Fast Draft, combine with the NaNoWriMo fire in November, and be editing/polishing by Christmas and querying — instead of still wading toward “the end.” We’ll see how it goes!

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Book Buzz Tag

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I’ve been tagged by Nadia

Rules:

I am going to list three categories of books: 5 MUST Read Books, 5 Books on Your Nightstand, and 5 Look For These Soon.

Anyone I tag should put these same lists on their blog but SUBTRACT one book from each list and ADD one of their own.

Then they should tag at least 5 more bloggers. It will be fun to see how the lists change as it goes around the blogosphere.

Please come back to this post and leave a comment so I can see how the lists are changing as they go around the blogosphere.

Since this is Book Buzz

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Friday Snippet – Letters to an English Professor

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In honor of finishing the expansion of Letters, I decided to share my favorite brand new scene with you guys. Adding Mason’s subplot was not only a blast — he’s a mathematics professor, so I got to have all sorts of fun with that — but also allowed me to show Conn in an entirely non-aggressive friendship role and not the dominant bent on dragging Rae out from beneath Miss Belle’s porch. *winks* I’m not going to do the Linky thing, just the excerpt.

Muttering and crying although he

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Obscure Math Jokes

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Ah, there’s nothing quite like the scent of e-queries in the air, tantalizing hopes and dreams for a quick request while butterflies the size of Texas crash about in my stomach.

I finished a project last night that made me feel GOOD. I was actually able to use references to Runge Kutta, Mobius strip, quantum knots, splines and…I think it’s pretty darned funny even if you have no idea what those things are. Of course, if you *know*, then they’re even funnier. The laughter is absolutely necessary to balance the agonized raw emotions throughout the rest of the story. Who thought a masters in mathematics and an unforgettable class in Romantic Poetry would enable me to write math jokes in a story about an English professor who quotes Shelley and Byron at the most inopportune moments?

Yes, I finished the expansion of Letters to single-title length. It was one of those projects I *had* to finish. For myself. I had to make it right. *winks — key theme in the story* It’s still rather short on length, just squeaking by, but adding Conn’s POV was the best thing I could do for that story. I’m very happy with how it all played out.

In the end, that’s all that matters.

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Koray

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I’ve spent all night flipping through DeviantArt, amazed at all the talented artists. I saved several possibilities, but I think these two are the key inspirations.

Although this one has an anime feel, I love the harshness inherent in this drawing. Look how thin she is, her ribs showing, but there’s nothing fragile or weak about her. I love the wild blowing hair and cape thing. The clothing isn’t right–especially the skimpy top–but at least she’s not totally bodacious.

I also like this one, especially her eyes and the classic lines of her face.

If anyone has other ideas, I’d love to see them, but I think I can move back to plotting.

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Casting Call

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I’m looking for inspiration for my Given in Fire heroine, Koray. She needs to be extremely tough and strong. She does the saving and the fighting, not the other way around. Keldar is a hard land, a hard life, and she’s used to suffering thirst and brutal heat. Her coloring should be rather dark. I described Chanda’s hair color as the multi-colored scales of the Krait snake blended with threads of fire, and Koray would look somewhat similar. She might fight with scimitar or knives, but she has magic, too. An image strongly associated to her is a white snake, and she can be just as poisonous as a Mamba, as she’ll discover in the story.

The inspiration can be a real actress/model, a role from a movie, a fantasy art rendering, etc. as long as I can see it online and print a copy for the storyboard. I’ve googled and searched to no avail. So many of the fantasy art sites return the damsel in distress with the big beefy barbarian — and that is soooo not Keldar. She’s more Aiel than anything (aka Robert Jordan) but that’s not right either. Any recommendations?

The hero of Given in Fire was easy. I wanted a cultured Prince look, sexy but not with the typical warrior attitude. Yet despite his princely upbringing, there’s a serious darkness in the hero. He’s suffered torture and exposure so great that his mind may be broken. After watching The Dark Knight, how could I not take a look at Christian Bale? The fire in this one is especially inspiring and the wild, crazy look in this one is spot on. However, NOW he’s not real thrilled with “Ranulf” as his name. Not happy at all. He’s adamant that is not his name and I should go back to the drawing board.

Dang characters.

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Plotting: Refine the Block

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Previous posts: Raw Data, Ask the Questions, The Journey, Getting Stuck, Seek the Tone, Come Full Circle, the DVD Sleeve

A year or two ago, I took a quiz to find out what my “totem” animal is — sorry, I lost the link long ago or I’d share — and it suggested I was a horse at heart. Maybe that’s why each time I try to impose too much rigid structure on my process, I kick my stall to pieces. :D

At any point in this process so far, I may be writing. I don’t force myself to define all this work first. Each story unfolds differently. Each story needs different gel time in my head or on the page. I can rush the process too much–and have. That’s okay. It just means I have to revise more. No planning you work on before you write the story is wasted, even if you have significant revisions. The most important thing of all is to FINISH THE BOOK. Do whatever you’ve got to do to get to “the end.” If that means ditch the planning stage at some point and write, do it.

For Given in Fire, I decided to continue plotting the story. Some interesting elements have already come out. I have the “Burning in Water; Drowning in Flame” idea going. After getting the DVD Sleeve, I have a new metaphor/theme I want to play with: a candle. Watch for the little flares of magic out of the corner of your eyes. Those are the wonderful little serendipity elements that seem to mean nothing, but if you shelter those fragile little sparks, they could turn into something momentous. I know the idea of a candle is going to play a huge part in each character’s journey. It will be a symbol, in fact, for how they end up feeling about each other. Now that I know that, I can plan to use it from the very beginning. I can drop those little hints of foreshadowing into the story effortlessly before ever writing a word, and that’s what makes a symbol powerful. It’s the little subtle hints from the very beginning that tie the story together.

The next part of the process is to continue refining the DVD Sleeve, or “the Block.” We’ve already broken the story down into ten loose pieces. Now, break them down some more. As I walk each character through the Emotional Toolbox again, I will get more scene ideas. I’ll jot them down. As I look at the key words/themes that spark ideas, I’ll write them down. I’ll keep getting a list of possible scenes, and as I explore each one, I’ll ask a few questions.

What’s the goal of this scene? What’s the conflict? Why? What if Koray did this instead? Will this make her situation worse?

I also love to write a character letter for each core character, or interview them in some way. For the protagonist and love interest, I examine past defining events that lead them to this moment, to this ravine. I want to know their backstory, their core decisions that will make them act uniquely on the page. The most important thing I learn from these letters is WHY. Why does the character feel this way? Act this way?

Once I have backstory, I can lay a few more threads into place. If there’s some darkness in the past that I want to shine light on, I’ll mark that into the block.

From past experience, I know that each “scene” idea I end up with will be approximately 4 pages or 1000 words. Some will be longer; a few may be shorter. If I’m targeting around 20K for this story (but this isn’t written in stone–I can certainly go up to even 30K or possibly larger if I want), then I need roughly 20 or so sections. I’ll target about 2 detailed sections per DVD “block” title.

Again, I’m not going to perfect here. If one block suggests 3 sections, great. If one block only gives up 1 section, okay. I’m not even worrying about POV yet — although once I’ve refined the block to the desired number of sections, I do typically consider POV. Do I have a good balance? Does this story feel like 1st or 3rd? It can still surprise me. With Survive My Fire, I planned to write the whole thing in alternating 3rd, but Chanda came out so loudly, so strongly, I had no choice but to write her in 1st. That’s okay.

Depending on the story, I might create a storyboard for inspiration. I might also create a plotboard (scroll down the previous linked page) so I can visibly track the colored threads through the story and make sure I have a good balance. I might also create a spreadsheet so I can easily track my progress. Whatever feels useful for the story. I will say that the more details I have, the easier it is to write the story. I can put the “block” away and drag it out in a month or two, and very quickly pick up exactly where I left off.

How else do you think I’m tracking my progress through the Letters revision? A spreadsheet of scenes is my guide, even though I targeted the revisions I wanted to complete months ago.

Once you’ve refined the block, you could write a synopsis. This is a habit I’m trying to get into more and more so I can sell on proposal some day. I certainly have the story in my head, and while it will morph beneath the magic of writing, the core themes and arcs likely will not change, at least for me. In fact, once I “see” the story so clearly, I struggle to change it. It’s like a map blazed into the dark corners of my mind. To change it significantly, I have to wad the whole thing up, toss it in the mental garbage bin, and start over again. Even then, I can feel the afterimage lingering. (That’s why I decided to serialize the first draft of Night Sun Rising and start over again.)

What’s the use? Why “waste” this much time on plotting and thinking instead of doing the “fun” part of writing?

I can’t tell you how many stories I’ve started, finished maybe a chapter or three, and then stalled. Dozens. I *can* tell you that my first book — before I ever knew a thing about the craft of writing — took three full rewrites from scratch to get right. That doesn’t mean plotting can save any book. I’ve got two finished drafts of unrelated stories still on my harddrive that are in desperate need of work, and I did just as much plotting and thinking for them. But the key, here, is they’re FINISHED. First draft, the end.

After not finishing a single novel in 2005 because of doubt and fears, my number one goal is to finish. Plotting helps me get there.

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Plotting: The DVD Sleeve

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Previous posts: Raw Data, Ask the Questions, The Journey, Getting Stuck, Seek the Tone, Come Full Circle

This is something a mentor taught me a few years ago that helps set the foundation of structure into place. After stepping through the Emotional Toolbox once — recognizing the fact that I need to do it again for both characters — and brainstorming, I’m to the point, now, where I have a general feel for the story arc. I can see the hint of hills and valleys in my mind. They’re very foggy yet and undefined, but if I close my eyes and listen very hard, I can sense them there.

Think of the Scene Index of a DVD sleeve. Usually a movie is broken down into segments describing each scene, and a few scenes (4 or so) are grouped together on a single “page” of the index that you can flip through to start a movie anywhere you wish. I do the same thing when plotting a story.

Now it’s important (for me, at least) to not consider these written in stone. These *will* change, so the pressure is off. This is just the beginning. It’s a chance to think about your key words and themes, and use those words in a meaningful way to help break the timeline of Story down into measurable pieces. These are not scenes, but rather “groups” of scenes that sort of go together. I always do ten because that’s what I was taught. Either they happen at the same setting, or you can feel the beginning of a new “act” or the rise/fall of conflict. The important thing is to have fun with it. If it’s not fun, if it doesn’t feel good or comfortable, then don’t do it!

Personally, I find a very odd pleasure in coming up with scene/block names that mean something very significant to me, that I can publish here or talk about, and know exactly what I mean…but that *you* don’t know what I mean until you read the story. :D Wicked, I know. I think with all the talking I’ve done about Given in Fire that you’ll probably be able to tell in general what’s happening, but this “sleeve” is missing the nuances that will come later. Again, this is just the shell. A beginning.

The Cleft of the Rock
The World Must Burn
White Scales
Love Burns
Munakuri Lands
The Prodigal Prince
Thickening Shadows
My Lone Candle
The Well of Tears
Drown in Fire, Burn in Water