The notes and brainstorming I got yesterday were terrific. I finished the scene with Dharman last night, and then thought I’d just whip out a few sections on the Keldari, specifically their devalki. I mean, I know, loosely, what happened, but I’ve never written it down. Couldn’t be that hard. Right?
Er. I might have been mistaken.
I’m not happy with this section at all. The language of the beginning has the right cadence and feel of “prophesy” that I want, but the rest…well, it sucks. I “told” the whole thing and lost the sing-song quality of story I was shooting for. And you know what? That’s okay. I’ve got the bones down. Now this section needs some serious revision. Honestly, it will probably be rewritten from scratch. It may not even be “included” in the final story — but likely it will be told by one character as a fireside sort of story. It’s a legend that fits inside this story and DIRECTLY impacts how I need to resolve the ending. Crucial stuff. But it sure is hard and I’m definitely not happy with it yet.
Word Count: 1003
NaNo Total: 15,578 16,227
Rewrote this morning’s section (no change to word count reflected; new section is actually a bit shorter). Yes, I know this isn’t the time for revision, but NaNoWriMo or not, this is a story I fully intend to polish and submit to my publisher, and I’d rather fix major issues now than wait until later. It’s still not perfect, but it’s better.
Then I wrote the next section for the antagonist, only 649 words but some lovely wicked stuff.
Snippet:
The Gods have many face and many names yet one eternal truth remains: love is the greatest gift of all, and the greatest sacrifice. In every age and every country, They consign Their Chosen to manifest Their hearts’ desire in the world, that all people may bear witness.
Love’s sacrifice conquers even the Blackest Heart of Shadow.
Damn, you are flying girl!! I’m behind you about 5k, but I’m determined to get caught up. You’re my main motivator right now.
And don’t worry about that scene. Keep going with the story and it will work out. You can adjust it once the rest of the pieces are in place.
Whoa, you are full steam ahead. My word coun is higher than my sidebar says but I’m only have of you. Good job.
Awesome progress! And don’t worry about the suck, of course – you can fix it later. But you know that. 🙂
I’m trying to keep up with you too, even though I know there’s really no hope. 😛 And I’m really glad you’re doing daily updates – they’re very inspirational! 😀
You are making this all very fun, Joely! Your entries are motivating! d:))
Happy first week of NaNo, Joely. A thought on the prophetic tone — I read ancient text translation works like The Egyptian Book of the Dead to get a feel for wording, cadence and length, and then try to adapt my wording of my prophecy to their rhythms and delivery, if that makes sense.
Good luck and keep going. 🙂
Thanks for the encouragement, guys! I love it!
I did rewrite the scene tonight. It’s still not perfect, but it’s much better. I can live with it. 🙄