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Fast Draft Day 003

I didn’t get quite as much accomplished this morning — but I expected that after the huge day yesterday.  Details, details, they’re crucial for some of these sites we’re visiting.  And the spelling!  Ack!  Q’umarkaj.  Utatlan.  Even Antigua (I always want to spell it with a q for some reason.)  Luckily I’ve found several pictures that help me set the mood.  I’ve been listening mostly to Apocalyptica and Evanescence on the play list.  Especially “Bring Me to Life” and “I Don’t Care.”

Today so far: 1,390

Total: 6,565

Snippet:  first draft only, subject to heavy revision later, still from the opening scene.  Some real life experiences getting added here — That Man just started a timeshare sales position this year!

“How long have I been bugging you to take a vacation?”  Natalie turned to me, grinning, but the concern in her eyes cut me to the quick.  “You need this, Cass.”

I nodded and some of the shadows eased from her eyes.  “It just seems like a fairytale.”

“You deserve a fairytale.”  She tried to laugh, but we both knew how close I’d come to dying.  She’d been the one to give me mouth to mouth until the paramedics arrived.  We’d always been as close as sisters, but now I owed her my life, too.  “Besides, whoever heard of a timeshare salesperson who never actually goes on vacation herself?”

Grateful that she returned to our long-standing banter instead of driving me to tears, I gave her a friendly shove.  “The top salespeople never go on vacation, silly.  We’re too busy making money selling other people their dream vacations.”

“Well, you’ve never sold a view like this.”  She swept her hand toward the glistening lake and the hazy volcanoes in the distance.  “This is pretty dreamy, Cass.”

I could only nod in agreement.

“Hey, you never finished your story, Jose.  Why does the quetzal have a red breast?”

Thanks to Nana, I knew this part of the legend.

“Believing the horse Alvarado rode to be a part of a terrible man-beast, Tecun Uman beheaded the creature.  Unharmed, Alvarado took the opportunity to stab the great warrior in the heart with his spear.  As Tecum lay dying, his quetzal flew down to lie weeping on his breast until he drew his last breath.  Ever since, the quetzal’s breast has been stained with Tecun’s blood as a reminder.”

“A reminder of what?  The Spaniards’ cruelty?”

Jose turned to me with a peculiar look on his face, careful and reverent.  “That someday, he will return.”

Uneasy, I jerked my gaze back to the lake.  I didn’t know if I could ever see so much water and not remember.  The sound of crashing metal on metal.  Thick smoke on the air, the stench of gasoline.  The screams.  Our small pontoon had been broadsided by a party boat, more of a yacht than Lake Taneycomo could really support.

Bone-chilling cold water had closed over my head while fireworks exploded behind my eyes.  Blood on the water.  My blood.  I knew I was dying.  Darkness.

I thought near-death experiences were supposed to be tunnels of light and a blessed feeling of peace, but I’d seen an obsidian pyramid.  A man had pulled me out of the water and lifted me to the sun blazing at the top.  I remembered the feel of his big hands on my back, the heat of his body bringing my cold, dead limbs back to life, his mouth on mine as he gave me his breath. Long blue-green feathers had hung in my face along with his hair, as shiny and black as the pyramid.

Most of all, I remembered his voice whispering in my ear.  Deep and rumbly, his voice had vibrated my bones.  “You’re well-named, Cassandra, for you can bring light to my people.  Help me return.  Only you can bring me through the gate.”

Even now, that distinctive growling voice made my bones want to dissolve my body into a pile of goo. 

Help me return.

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Fast Draft Day 002b

I said this on Twitter:  some days the words just roll out like a dream.  That was today.

I wrote over lunch and promptly forgot to eat.

As soon as I finished the Evil Day Job, I started again instead of cooking dinner.  Ooops.  We had to eat out once That Man got home.  (Not entirely a bad thing of course!  Yum–and no dishes.)

I’m paying for it now with an eye-strain headache and sore wrists, but it was a very rare, fabulous writing day.  So far, the story is going EXACTLY like I planned.  I can’t stop thinking about it.  I see it all so clearly that I can hear the characters…I don’t want to lose that before I can capture the words.

Total for the day:  3,782

Grand total:  5,175 words

And I’m still tinkering with the file.

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Fast Draft Day 002

I got bogged down in a few details this morning so I was afraid I wouldn’t get my words.  I wanted a couple of variations of Kukulkan — all the names he’s been known as across the various Mesoamerican peoples.  Then I needed Tecun’s real name — and I couldn’t find it.  I knew I’d seen it somewhere, but it wasn’t in my notes.  I finally remembered that it was at the end of the Popol Vuh (and since I have a copy with tons of post-it notes sticking out of it, I didn’t bother writing it down).  Tecun Uman K’iqab, Black Butterfly Grandson of K’iqab, who was one of the rulers of the K’iche. 

The scene I was working on was trying to introduce him — and I had to get it right. 

Of course I had to look up how to spell some words too.  Quetzalcoatl I got right, but not Teotihuacan.  (I truly feel sorry for whoever gets to voice these names if the story is a). accepted and b). ever goes to Audible.)  And yes, I know that in a real Fast Draft I shouldn’t have bothered spelling them correctly — that’s what Revision Xibalba is for.  However, I want this draft to be as solid and readable as possible and misspellings of major things drives me nuts.  Of course some of these details might get edited out in revisions too.  I don’t want it to read like a history book.

Anyway, despite my hang ups this morning, I still made good progress, bringing my total wordage to 2,865.  As always when I start a hard round of true Dark & Early — and drink too much coffee — I get an upset stomach.  So only one cup this morning, along with toast.  I’m also ravenous (because I’ve been up since BEFORE the butt crack of dawn) which makes my diet challenging.  So I’m having smaller meals more often.  I’m really craving scones, so I might try to make some healthy ones tonight.  That’ll be my treat D&E tomorrow morning.

I’ll continue a bit from yesterday’s first line, but remember this is only first draft.  I’m not sure that I’ve nailed the voice yet (which is CRUCIAL in first person).  Openings usually go through several iterations before I get it right — but I’m pretty sure that first line has to stay.  🙂

I heard a quetzal calling outside my window again last night.

A few months ago—before I nearly drowned—I’d never even heard of the strange bird.  Now it seemed to roost outside my window every damned night.

Glaring up at the invisible watcher hidden in the tree limbs, I muttered beneath my breath. “I thought queztals were extinct.”

“Some say they are, because the bird we know today surely isn’t the magnificent bird of legend,” our guide said in an agreeable voice.  I don’t think anything would rattle Jose’s calm, leathery exterior.  At least my constant American questions hadn’t upset him.  “We still revere them.”

“I think that one has a red breast.”  Natalie peered up into the shadowed growth like Sherlock Holmes.  My best friend was determined to prove all this mumbo-jumbo shit was all in my head.  I couldn’t fault her for trying.  In fact, I wished she could.  I didn’t want some strange holy bird howling outside my window every night.  Let alone the other dreams.

Despite the sauna-like air filling my lungs and frizzing my hair, I shivered.

“Oh, very lucky, then,” Jose replied.  “Let me tell you our legend of how the quetzal came to bear its red breast.

“Many say that when the great Tecun Uman went to fight the demon conquistador Pedro de Alvarado not far from here, that his quetzal nahual, or spirit guide, went with him.  Some say Tecun even transformed into the mighty bird during the battle, his massive wings buffeting the Spaniards and shielding his people from their terrible weapons.”

Jose paused his tale as we reached the end of a long avenue of overgrown trees.  Ahead, a sprawling house stretched across the countryside, beautiful despite the jungle trying to overtake it.  Perched on the knees of a verdant volcano, the house commanded an incredible view of Lake Atitlan below. 

Cradled between three massive volcanoes, Lake Atitlan claimed to be the most beautiful—and possibly the deepest—lake in the world.  I couldn’t bear to look at it.

Water closing over my head.  Cold.  So cold.  Blood on the water.

Shuddering at the memory, I shielded my eyes and scanned the house again.  Rows of coffee fields curved up the side of the volcano.  So green.  I’d never known such an incredible, lush green before coming to Guatemala.  Birds sang in the trees, not the annoying call of the quetzal that kept me up all night.  With the huge bushes and trees trying to swallow the house, I could almost picture what Eden had been like.  Lush, riotous growth everywhere I looked.

“Are you sure this is it?”  I asked our guide.

“I checked the papers this morning.  The house is still deeded to Carla Gonzales.”

My grandmother, Nana, who’d set my feet on this adventure.

No, I whispered to myself.  Drowning started this little nightmare.

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Fast Draft Day 001

Up at 5 AM this morning with coffee waiting on me.  I didn’t sleep well — but then I never do before a big push like this.  I made the mistake of thinking about how I was going to start this novella — priming the pump, so to speak — and then I couldn’t get it to shut off.  Plus it stormed last night, and Middle was up late fighting sudden 101 fever after a day of company (I hope she didn’t infect anyone!).  She’s very upset because she has perfect attendance.  🙁 

A slow start at first but then I managed to finish the first scene.  It’ll need a lot of work later, of course, but I’m happy with what I got so far.

1,393 words.

First line:

I heard a quetzal calling outside my window again last night.

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An April Fast Draft

Sometimes an idea comes together like a lightning strike.  Perfect, clear, powerful.  The timing is good, and it makes sense to insert this project into my to-do list now rather than later, so I’m going for it.

Almost a year ago (MayNoWriMo) I was working on Maya#2, and while doing some research, I ran across the legend of Tecun Uman, the Guatemalan national hero.  I took a lot of notes about him and his mythic battle against Alvarado that ultimately led to his death and the defeat of the K’iche.  I knew it was important, but I didn’t have a story.  The synopsis I wrote for Maya#2 would lead to an interesting story — but I don’t feel compelled to write it.  I’ve changed my direction this past year.  I’m working harder to firm up my brand.  While I loved the idea of The Bloodgate Priestess (working title for #2), I just don’t think it’s the best story for me to write right now.

Fast forward to last weekend, and I had a waking sort of dream.  I saw Kukulkan’s pyramid — the shiny obsidian one from the other side of the Bloodgate — and a sacrifice.  Although it wasn’t the kind of sacrifice you’re probably thinking.  *winks*  One thing lead to another, and suddenly the dots connected between Tecun Uman, Kukulkan, and the Bloodgates.  In a few days, I managed to get the entire story plotted on my handy-dandy spreadsheets.  Both characters have ran through the Emotional Toolbox.  The story fits within my BRAND I want to build. 

Even more significant, I’ve dreamed about the story again.  The ending plays out in my mind like a movie.

Starting tomorrow, I’m going to pull a modified Fast Draft.  I’m not going to shoot for 20 pages a day — but I am going to shoot to finish a first draft of this novella by the end of the month.  The fire is stoked — I’m going to take advantage of it.  I think it’ll end up closer to 30K than 20K, but if I can get a minimum of 1K a day, I’ll be in good shape to finish by the end of the month.  I’m excited enough about this story to face getting up at 5 AM everyday to finish it.

Never fear, Vicki fans — I finished her synopsis yesterday.  We have company arriving today, but my task tonight will be to edit the synopsis again and write the query, so I can submit sometime on Monday when I have the chance to review everything one more time.  I also turned back in Golden copyedits yesterday — the last time I’ll touch that ms before its release August 29th. 

My slate is clear.  It’s a GO for —

THE BLOODGATE WARRIOR.

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Winner: Steampunk Necklace

First off, a huge thank you to everyone who’s bought Lady Doctor Wyre since her release!  Thank you for everyone’s comments on the giveaway post – I can see I have a lot of etsy shopping in my future.  Of course, a HUGE thank you to 19Moons for creating such an incredible prize in the first place!

The winner of the steampunk heart necklace is Junegirl63!  Please e-mail me at joelysueburkhart AT gmail DOT com with your snail mail addy so I can ship your prize!

Thank you to everyone who entered!

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Manic Plotter

My work on Vicki’s synopsis has been temporarily blindsided by a new project.  Unscheduled — but necessary, and it makes sense to do this sooner than later.  I’ve been researching like mad and plotting on paper with green ink — the green is significant for this particular character.  Tonight, I got a first draft of the plot and I’ve already thought of a few more things I need to add, nice little details that will make this story richer.

And it all started from a half-walking dream I had a couple of nights ago.

No, I haven’t been sleeping very well, why do you ask?  *wry grin*

I feel a Fast Draft coming on, because I’d really really like to get this project done quickly.  Anyone up for a quick, hard, and dirty first draft race later this month?

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Good News Monday

Urgh, I really need some positive thinking today.  I’ve been fighting a cold all weekend with oranges and homemade chicken soup, but I can barely taste my coffee this morning.  And it’s Monday!  *insert dramatic groans*  So let’s concentrate on the positive…

  • I’ve FINALLY hit the 25 pounds lost mark!  The last week was really tough and I have to admit, I almost wavered right off that weight-loss wagon.  But I held on and the scale finally cooperated.
  • Using everything I’ve learned lately from Alissa (on the Golden edits) and Angie (Before You Hit Send workshop), I made one more pass through Vicki.  I also addressed two little things that beta readers commented about, threading some new backstory all the way through the book.
  • I worked on Vicki’s synopsis yesterday but don’t quite have a finished draft.  As soon as I do, and I polish it a little, I’ll be able to submit!  Yay.  That’s definitely good news!

Next up on my to-do list:  Golden#2 or Lady Wyre#2.  I want to get a little momentum built on these two new series before I hop to Phantom.

Remember you can still enter to win Molly Burkhart’s signed My Gigolo or the Steampunk Necklace (see below posts).  Also, I haven’t heard from the Eternal Rider winners yet.  If I don’t hear from you in the next few days, I’ll draw two new names.

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Giveaway: Molly Burkhart’s My Gigolo (signed)

I’m so excited for my Beloved Sis – her first print book is shipping NOW!  To help her celebrate, I’m offering two signed copies of her book.  Just comment here through April 4th and tell me your favorite zombie movie or story.  Why zombies?  You need to check out Molly’s Undead Christmas Lyrics.  I’ll have the monsters pick two names out of the hat on April 5th.

P.S. It might take me a couple of weeks to get the copies signed – we live almost two hours apart and both work full time.  But I’ll ship as soon as I have them signed and in my greedy hands!

You can also still enter the Steampunk Necklace Giveaway.